縱觀多年來國家四、六級英語作文考試,考生作文成績欠佳的主要原因除了準確性和連貫性差之外,語句軟弱無力也是不容忽略的一個方面。因此在英語寫作教學中,如何增強語句表現力的問題必須引起我們足夠的重視,以提高學生寫作的表達質量。為此,筆者結合自己的寫作教學實踐,針對該項技能的訓練提出了一些切實可行的有效做法,供廣大同仁和英語學習者參考借鑒。 一、避免使用語意弱的“be”動詞。 1、把句中的表語轉換為不同的修飾語。例如: Weak: The trees are bare. The grass is brown. The landscape seems drab. Revision:The brown grass and bare trees form a drab landscape. (轉換為前置定語) Or: The landscape, bare and brown, begged for spring green. (轉換為并列結構作后置定語) 2、將作表語用的形容詞或名詞變為行為動詞。例如: 1) Weak: The team members are good players. Revision: The team members play well. 2) Weak: One worker’s plan is the elimination of tardiness. Revision: One worker’s plan eliminates tardiness. 3、在以“here”或“there”開頭的句子中,把“be”動詞后的名詞代詞變成改寫句的主語。例如: 1) Weak: There is no opportunity for promotion. Revision: No opportunity for promotion exists. 2) Weak: Here are the books you ordered. Revision: The books you ordered have arrived. 二、多用語意具體的動詞,保持句意簡潔明了。例如: 1、Poor: My supervisor went past my desk. Better: My supervisor sauntered (=walked slowly) past my desk. 2、Poor: She is a careful shopper. Better: She compares prices and quality. 三、盡量運用主動語態。例如: 1、Weak: The organization has been supported by charity. Better: Charity has supported the organization. 2、Weak: The biscuits were stacked on a plate. Better: Mother stacked the biscuits on a plate. 四、防止使用語意冗長累贅的詞語。例如: 1、Wordy: My little sister has a preference for chocolate milk. Improved: My little sister prefers chocolate milk. 2、Wordy: We are in receipt of your letter and intend to follow your recommendations. Improved: We have received your letter and intended to follow your recommendation. 3、Redundant: We had a serious crisis at school yesterday when our chemistry laboratory caught fire. Improved: We had a crisis at school yesterday when our chemistry laboratory caught fire. 4、Redundant: My sister and I bought the same, identical dress in different stores. Improved: My sister and I bought the same dress in different stores. 五、杜絕濫用陳舊詞語或難懂的專業術語。例如: 1、Weak: They will not agree to his proposals in any shape or form. Improved: They will not agree to any of his proposals. 2、Weak: I need her financial input before I can guesstimate our expenditures next fall. Improved: I need her financial figures before I can estimate our expenditures next fall.
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